Tuesday, July 29, 2008

perspectives:one

She watched the boy, sitting hunched over at the bench, elbows on his knees. Every now and then he would unclasp his hands to wipe his eyes, and sniffle. Past the green jungle gym and the bright yellow slide she watched him crying.

The second thing the girl noticed after seeing he was crying was that he was around her age. A sixteen/seventeen-year old boy crying on a bench at a playground was not something you saw everyday, and she wondered why; wondered about both why it was happening, and why it wasn't something you saw everyday.

After she noticed the first and second things, and had wondered a bit, she thought about how she could help him. It seemed to be an innate part of her species to help their own when they were weeping. There was also the added element of curiosity, a seed which now sown was waiting to overgrow her mind.

"It's probably a break-up," said her subconscious, a decently reliable source. She pondered what had been said, and, before dismissing it completely, ordered it to take a seat for possible further examination.

She wanted to help him. The seed had been plucked from the fertile soil of her brain and had been thrown out; the truck delivering the General Compassion had dropped off its delivery, and she had drank from the cool, refreshing bottle.

If only she could get up and walk, feet sinking into the sand, ducking her head under the colourfully painted metal bars, across the playground, and talk to him. That's all it would take- a simple walk, twenty, thirty steps.

She wished she had no feet. That would give her an excuse.

9 comments:

-evan said...

first fully fictional piece written thus far.

sorry for being so late.

songs listened to while writing this:

gotta have you - the weepies
hot in herre - jenny owen youngs
nobody knows me at all - the weepies

May-Belle said...

PART TWO PART TWO.

why are you so talented. sigh.
it makes me all happy and sad inside.
and terribly deficient feeling.

you have a gift at clinching last lines.

Anonymous said...

"it seeemed to be an innate part of her species to help their own when they are weeping."

welcome to the savior complex. lol

i like this clincher: "she wished she had no feet. That would give her an excuse."

cant wait to read part two!

May-Belle said...

haha.
like he needs to be welcomed to it.
we had a whole clan suffering from it.

Anonymous said...

weepies :)

very nice, please continue
i hate stopping between things...

-also,
slightly insulted that you'd think i need a reminder when i check this blog every time im online..
i remember things...
i even remembered that webcomic
estancia (? haha)

-im just waiting for the right day to sit down and read it.

Anonymous said...

hey
today is kelli's birthday!

-evan said...

sending a reminder to everyone is comforting to yours truly. so, uh- don't be offended.

please.

Anonymous said...

bravo.
*clapclap*

Anonymous said...

I agree with what other people said-the last line makes the whole piece.