Wednesday, April 1, 2009

just dance.

If you have ever sat beneath Nelson’s Column facing south, then I’m sure you have had the immensity of the National Gallery fill your vision; just like on any other day. However, if you had been doing the same this afternoon, and if you have been so fortunate as to have been blessed with particularly keen eyesight, something peculiar might have caught your eye.

If you had been outside the main entrance of the National Gallery, your back to countless works of art and multitudes of noisy schoolchildren, leaning over the railing of the balcony, it would not have taken much for your gaze to be drawn down towards the square grounds.

Often times the section of pavement located before the Gallery was occupied by a street performer or some other not-as-entertaining individual trying to scrounge the public for their spare change. However, today was a Tuesday, and the likelihood of there being a crowd gathered around some street magician or people-pleaser was greatly diminished.

Beneath the hulk of the National Gallery one man stood where so many others had before and did it without an open hat or guitar case, without chains to escape from, without gimmicks and without music.

Without music anyone else could hear, to be precise.

In his right hand he clutched a Walkman, the record player of the 21st century. He wore headphones that swung back and forth with each and every step, every smooth, energetic step.

His feet stepped left and right, clad in black dress shoes. Moving upwards, dark slacks encased a pair of swaying legs. Despite his bulky frame, a too-large leather jacket came down mid-thigh, worn over a dark blue shirt. His hair was buzzed short, and all his emotion was shown in his dark-chocolate face and the movement of his body.

Eyes closed in confidence, his right foot came down, toe first, and his heel snapped left once, twice, three times. He spun around completely, fingers flung outwards on his left hand, Walkman again his chest.

The man jived and bucked his hips, and kept within that little patch of pavement. A kick left with the right foot, a step right, back, left, another spin around. He did the moonwalk, and from the sound his shoes made against the pavement you would have expected skid marks on the cement.

Every now and then there were a few spectators, people who stood and watched, both on the ground and from up on the Gallery. People snapped photos and spoke to each other under their breath; they were amused, confused.

If you had walked past him you would have seen the front of his shirt was dark with sweat.

7 comments:

-evan said...

um. hey- surprisingly, i was able to write most of this yesterday, and sort of finish polishing it up this morning.

written while listening to:

spider-man (the movie)

we share our mother's health (ratatat remix) - the knife

technologic (ratat remix) - daft punk

fresh prince of bel air (cover) - katy pettigrew

the list goes on- but hey, i really only name the songs because i want you (the reader) to listen to them.

(i recommend watching spider-man, as opposed to just listening to it)

May-Belle said...

the ending is perfect. i love the last line.

your descriptoin of the general street-performers was clumsy. too wordy. you need to make it more crisp.

over all very nice. image of skid marks is very nice.
as well as people being confused.and amused.

also listen to wine red.
its fantastic,

Anonymous said...

i like it,
i like that i could recognize the moves. michael jackson. BOOM YEAH.

and i like the last line. and that he has a walkman and not an ipod. :D

the beginning was a little confusing,
but the middle-end was superb!
brava!

SAM

Anonymous said...

very nice, I didn't know you liked ratatat.

t to

Anchor Records said...

lines i love:
-In his right hand he clutched a Walkman, the record player of the 21st century.
-Eyes closed in confidence...

the part leading up to the man can be tightened up a bit.

not sure how i feel about the ending. it seems abrupt -- but i'm not sure how else you could end it. i like it, but am left wanting something more...

is there a reason he is dancing?

Tabitha said...

I like it. It's not a story, just a description, and it's good that way. I can picture him just like I'm there. (And hey, I have been there . . .) I like how you describe the National Gallery--immensity, hulk, countless works of art. So true . . .

Lauren said...

I said I would comment a while ago and I never got around to it...so here's some belated remarks:

my favorite line of this was "...that swung back and forth with each and every step, every smooth energetic step." The rhythm is perfect and it made me feel the way he was moving.

I actually think that the way you took a while to lead up to the dancing man was done well. You started out general with the "immensity" of the setting, and then you gradually narrowed down and became more specific until the reader is focusing only on the single man who is living within the massive scene with no other motive but to block out the chaos and enjoy himself in that moment. Nicely done.